Ebere Wabara
YOU are welcome to our language clinic. From THISDAY of October 13 comes this: “Otti, who spoke through his Deputy (deputy), Ikechukwu Emetu….” A rewrite: Abia Deputy Governor, Ikechukwu Emetu, who spoke on behalf of Otti…. Nobody speaks by anybody, please gents. Or, merely, communicate for anyone. Emetu who spoke for….
“Nigeria needs officials like Oshungboye, says Oba of Benin” (THISDAY POLITY, October 13) Get it proper: Nigeria wants official like Oshungboye or officers like Oshungboye, Wabara…. (let me blow my very own trumpet—no one will blow it for me!)
“How Super Eagles watched Algeria emerged (emerge) as next foe on TV” (THISDAY SPORTS XTRA, October 13) This is the worst collocation to date this month!
“Otti swears-in (swears in) commissioners, warns against non-performance” Phrasal verbs abhor hyphenation.
“The testimony of Major Hamza Al-Mustapha, former CSO to late General Sani Abacha….” A fox and his bagful of yarns: former CSO to the late General Sani Abacha
“The corporation said it is (was) determined to protect depositors by all means.” (THISDAY, October 18)
“Food crop production has declined rapidly and this is largely attributable to soil despoilation….” Frequent oil spills within the Niger Delta axis: despoliation.
“Money speaks, we will interprete” Spell-check: interpret.
“He said the taking over of these banks by AMCON will (would) not….” (Source: as above) Yet one other Business English (commercialese)
“The boys who were to kill us started fighting themselves” (Nigerian Tribune, October 14) This method: The boys fought each other (not themselves). Except, after all, they had been on a suicide mission!
“English Premiership kicks-off in grand style August 9” (THE GUARDIAN, July 13) This is incongruent with flagship journalism: inclusion of hyphens in phrasal verbs!
“Banks nationalization: Accusing fingers point at regulators” (SATURDAY TRIBUNE, October 17) A rewrite: Banks’ (pay attention to the apostrophe) nationalization: The finger factors at regulators
“Adanma who is based in the United States and works as a medical personnel….” (Source: as above) ‘Personnel’ is a collective noun and can’t operate as used. Get it proper: a medical official, worker, employee, service supplier, assistant, hand…
“President Bola Tinubu has warned that forceful takeover of power through coup d’etats will no longer be tolerated….” Conscience, nurtured by fact: coups d’ etat
“Orji Kalu mourns late Hausa leader” (DAILY INDEPENDENT Online, October 12) The senator couldn’t have mourned somebody who was alive! Therefore, he mourns Hausa chief.
“Veteran golfers converge at Ikeja club” (Source: as above) Let us go {golfing} as we converge on Ikeja Club.
“…maintained that Nnamdi was hale and healthy in a faraway northern part of the country.” (THE GUARDIAN, October 11) For the recuperation of Ogbuefi: hale and hearty
“She argued that a pact such as is being advocated for by the lawmakers amounted to Nigeria’s re-orientation.” Remove ‘for’.
“I searched in vain for the Ministry of Defence and, unless the text I had was defective, it was conspicuously absent.” ‘Absence’ doesn’t require any qualification. Simply, it was absent.
“His Excellency…Ambassador Extraordinary (Extraordinaire) and Plenipotentiary….”
“In fact, the situation has degenerated from that of epileptic power supply down to that of complete/total blackout which in most cases lasts from weeks to months.” ‘Blackout’ doesn’t want any modifier—it means whole extinction or concealment of lights. Furthermore, ‘blackout’ can’t be modified (partial, for example).
“The reasons range from power generation limitation to the use of overaged (overage), antiquated and arsenic hydro-terminal plants and so many others too numerous to mention.” Agreed that ‘overage’ means ‘too old’ (used largely for human beings), however for contextualization and language grasp, ‘obsolete’ (for inanimate issues) ought to have been it.
“Many people have lost their household properties as a result of uncontrolled power voltage.” Time to take away the immunity of PHCN: property (not properties) on this context.
“The consensus of opinion in the country today.…” Despite the pockets of debate on what some learner’s dictionaries say, I insist on consensus (with out opinion, which is non-obligatory anyway).
“It can be an open secret {that a} cabal of extremely positioned sacred cows holds the gasoline distribution course of within the nation to ransome. “ Spell-check: ransom.
“Council chairmen and legislators at the council, state and federal levels would also later be sworn-in (sworn in) for the take off (take-off) of the tenth Republic.” Again, phrasal verbs don’t admit hyphenation.
“The Yorubas, Igbos and even Northern minorities have grudges….” English isn’t any politics: the Yoruba, the Igbo and the Northern minorities.
“Except round pegs are put in round holes, the nation will be the looser (loser) for it.”
“It is arguable if the current spate of advancement (advancements) recorded in the area of….”
“Thank God he is concerned at (about/for/over/in—depending on context—never at) the security situation.”
“There were other ministers in the last dispensation who performed creditably well, but who were not re-appointed.” Get it proper: ministers who carried out creditably or effectively. ‘Creditably well’ is an over-kill. Both can’t co-function.
“Thus, a core investor…with regards to optimal use of the machinery.…” (THE GUARDIAN, October 12) Either as regards or with regard to….
“In the heydays of the goggled General when fuel was often unavailable…” (THE GUARDIAN, October 20) Stranglehold of oil employees: heyday (uncountable).
“Last year, many houses of the Igbo in Ajegunle, a suburb of Lagos, were razed down.…” (THISDAY, October 20) No phrase abuse: merely razed (not razed down). Discard the opposite views by some registers!
Yet one other headline gaffe: “Restrictions on inter-bank foreign exchange trading is (are) killing the market.”
“Armed robbers now have good company—street thugs and unofficial vigilante groups.” (THE GUARDIAN, October 19) Democracy as a disincentive: vigilance teams.
“Nigeria is at a crossroad” (VANGUARD, October 19) Fixed expression: at a/ the crossroads.
“Stationeries badly needed by.…” (DAILY INDEPENDENT Online, October 19) ‘Stationery’ is non-count.
“Senator to be arraigned in court over certificate” (DAILY News Front Page Sub-headline, October 19) Where else would he have been arraigned if not court docket? Okija Shrine?
The subsequent two contributions are from Sonde Abbah, Abuja (08032159249): “105 graduates (graduate) from BUK”
“NAPPS call (calls) for review…”
